good one dog, im a father, i got a few peices out there about my son [the lil don] one of them is gettin put to a beat right now, but i have to wait till eveyones gone to record it, got ppl sleepin all the time when i awake there asleep so it dont werk out, plus i put alotta emotion into it, its to the beat of B.I.G.s ready to die, anyway, as for critique it was short, ur lines were a few sylables too lon, it didnt match werd, but it was a good drop ill up it for you