yea...Well, i'm here from another site...just looking at other sites...I am a very critical person...and here goes my two cents...

This was a very good piece...so obviously pre-written, so the good thing was that you were able to re-read, and edit. There's nothing worse than reading verses with mispelling and punctuation errors. This is raw emotion, and you let it flow nicely. Honestly, I would say this is on the more poetic side. I'm happy you're not writing like some of these fools here...guns, girls, money, fame...all the materialistic bullshit. I like this alot... I would quote some lines...but that would just flood this thread...

OVERALL: tight piece, keep up...just give it your all.

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