I didnt like this piece i feel words were thrown in simply because they rhyme--

morbid
for it was the core that burnt him most torrid
the light was not brighter
might was only metaphysical
metaphorically tore it

This is a good example of what i mean this opening was very weak. I dont belive this should make it to the next round.

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