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Old 04-07-03, 02:17 PM   #7
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I wasn't really into this piece for a couple reasons..

1) They depart from the light my soul torn apart
No deception no deceit no lies all discreet

I feel just these two lines ruined the whole poem- I will also say the rest of the poem does not stay strong--

shouldn't proceed
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