yo, hey man, let see... ok... yo I gottah respect that this is from the heart and shit... props for putting that out, being real and not gettin embarresed of what peeps may think.... but, lyrically... this could of been better.... it was pretty simple to me... but I guess, when writing emotional pieces... it's abit hard to focus on skill... oh and this flowed pretty good man...
I recently wrote something like this... called "Broken", if you see it check it out... You'll see I agree wit what you saying...
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