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Well...hmmm...
...i felt the approach to this topic was fairly good, and kind of original too...
...the start was strong enough, if not a bit shakey at times...but you remained on the concept well...even though once you got off the start (first 3-4 lines) i felt your execution of some lines was below par..it began to disrupt the flow a bit, and felt less poetic, and therefore the depiction was also disrupted in a way...
...still, i felt it kept on going strong enough...and you ended it off very well..
so my vote is: You DO go through
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