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Old 04-08-03, 09:45 AM   #1
Spittin Quik
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Wink Critique this pleez

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Obvioulsy i got major problems so help me out Pleez!!

Yo
My words are like tymed rhymed mines//
Ready to blow/
They shoot out fine line needles//
To make ur head explode//
Im like a ghost//
When u see me i vanish//
The one they hate most//
Cuz i made them vanish//
Outta a thin air like the great Houdini//
I grant three wishes like a bottle genie//
To quit this battle cuz u through//
Ur words no longer punched proof//
instead their soundproof//
Cuz they so whack//
Full of shit//
I can hear em''
Makin my wig split//
So if u still runnin yo mouth//
Let me know when ur finish so i can rip yo insides out//
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