That was funny but whack. I mean, I relize it wasn't intended to be a spectacualr peice but it was still pretty basic, and I'm not hating, just critisizing so you can improve. To me the flow sounded like a nursery rhyme. the way the bars were set up, you rhymed one word at the end of every line, and you used that word once.. what I mean is

Sadaam likes penis...and so its been said ~
he was caught in the white house giving 'W' Head ~
george was excited and he started to cum ~
farted and yawned while sadaam got it all over his tongue ~

Said - Head, Cum - Tounge.. one sylable basic rhyme style. I havn't dropped a verse ina while so I having trouble with my flow right now but I used to always used multi-sylable rhymes.. I never rhyme just one sylable words, anything sounds tight if you use multisylable rhymes

It don't matter who I battle, I'm always spitting-faster/
I rip hard core emcees, you struggle with Skittles-wrappers(rappers)/

Spittin-faster - Skittles-wrappers(rappers) Multisylable. Plus a little word play. not bad for a thirtsy second key. :-P haha. I hope that all that shit I just wrote helps, don' take it the wrong way though. Everyone needs improvment.. Me especially.. Just a little cnstrucktive crittisim
PeaCe
~Out

Looking forward to out battle, I am pretty much done with my verse, I'll probably drop it within the hour. Peace