^votes dont count.

Tik's scale of grade:

Metaphors:
the whole thing was a mtaphore but i believe for a piece to be truly beutiful you must not need to explain them. at first ebfore readign your comment at the end i never picked up on the shadows bit but with your explanation it came through. try not to need to explain it but use more words that relate to your topic so we get the point.

Imagery:
Fairly well carried the whole way through. Used very good vocab to not really create the scene but make us think it, hear it, taste it. Your vocabullary is vast and it works to your advantage, but try to use stronger adjectives to describe whats goin on. But, well done.

Originality/Style:
As V said, it was very original in the way you did it and came out strong. your vocab itself sets you apart from the weaker poets, and makes you stand out. THe flow was good, i had no troubles following until near the end. V said it was blunt, i think you coulda went deeper there, giving the total metaphorical style to your piece.

Overall:
Good piece, nice short, easy to read.
On a scale of 1-10 id have to rank it an 8

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