^votes dont count.

Tik's scale of grade:

Metaphors:
none really, but it didnt affect it much. try to incorperate more next time.

Imagery:
very well done. the first four luines amazed me. some of the best writing ive seen from a kid i never heard about.

Originality/Style:
first story poem ive seen from a writer other than myself in a while. fairly well done. excellent take on the topic. well put and done.

Overall:
Good piece, nice imagery, well put.
On a scale of 1-10 id have to rank it an 8.5

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