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Old 04-08-03, 08:09 PM   #2
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I liked this a lot. The polarized views made me think, and beyond the mirror was a good metaphor. Good vocab, but maybe too bood at times, cuz some of the words made the flow a bit off. You kept a good scheme with the couplets, but sometimes they didn't rhyme. I felt it thought.
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