Metaphors:
Very little there. As Phrantik said, it was just there. Simple and in your face, nothing really to find. Therefore, lessing in power n what not...

Imagery:
Well, what Phrantik said. It had it's moments, and you got a solid 'base' of imagery. But you need to expand on it with slightly better vocab at the least. I mean vocab aint everything, and some great poems have been written with some very simple and straight forward vocab. But this just didn't come off as well as it could've.

Originality/Style:
You showed a little originality. But too elaborate. Your style wasn't executed well enough for it to flow as well as it coud've. still, showed signs of niceness, and it sure had it's moments.

Overall:
To the point, and to an extent the reader gets into the piece fairly well. But the pointsd made above worka gainst ya.

6/10 (average). (sorry, but the tourneys we've had have been on at a very high level, so it'd be unfair to lower the 'bar').