^^^your not saying anything your just saying something because it rhymes try putting some type of meaning behind your rhymes.

and you should have wrote it like this

"I cut with razor blades like shoulder blades//"

even though thats a wack line it looks better like that.



never for any reason never ever make a 2 word line.

just try sticking to the topic and make your lines longer

i tried to restructure it so you see what i mean.

"Ay yo
I cut with razor blades like shoulder blades//
See the line that i made down ur vertabrate//
Its ok But u might die the next day//
Like Eminem said to Dre" Yall betta make way"//
U still cant comprehend the words that i spit//
U 4got who this is its Spittin Quik Comin through with this shit//
Im like a mechanical pencil Pushed in 2 feed u lead//
With letter stencils Put Quik initials in yo head//
Cuz im that nice//
Leavin niggas shook out they draws like the Poltergiest//
And ill leave u spirtually hopeless Like a T.V show with no hostess//
And what i tell u i won this battle Here u go post this//"


try writing it more like that just keep writing you sound alot like me when i started. if you need any helo with your rhymes PM if im on the same time as you ill try to help.