yo, what up B... notice she said the same thing I told you like a week ago... you need to write with a beat, your flow is seriously off.. your vocab's a'ight.. try writing with use of metaphores and shit, don't get straight to the point, shimmy around it a little bit but still get it across... you stuck to the topic, most people don't when they first start, so you got that down.. the best advice I can really give you is to check other peoples shit and see what their doing, don't copy them but adopt a style..

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