that one's better bud... you had a few nice bars, you really gotta work on word play...

Live on one path so when you're stuck in a hole//
you can figure out a way to save your soul.//
^ I liked how that flowed...

yea the only advice I can give you is work on word play, you got a mad vocab, rhyme scheme plays out pretty well, all you gotta do is throw in some mind boggling play on words...

peace 1

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