umm.....
bro Ima be perfectly honest
that was wack, u shine on a couple of lines
which shows potential, but on the whole it was
all over the place, u didnt have a topic or vocab or
multies and really no metas or punches and dont drop
n-bombs if u're white, its not cool

if u want kats to respond u gotta bring sumpin original
and take ur time with it too, dont worry u'll get it
we all start somewhere
on ur next time just try to get ur thoughts together
and work at it, I can tell u have the ability to be really good
dont take it personel, just tryin to help