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Originally posted by shiznit
i like this part...but yeah i agree...need to up with the vocab and try to be more descriptive..not that its a bad thing but over all i like it...i can relate ...ive been in long distance relationship before and my man was like 3 hours away...we tried to work things out but it didnt work out....well keep doin ur thang gurll.....keep em commin
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Heh. What Dime said, not the same at all really.
Your 'man' is three hours away, probably working or studying, at worst struggling in some ghetto. Whilst her 'man' is in Iraq, fighting (well now trying to keep the peace), his life under constant threat...
...well i liekd the piece, simple, to the point, depicting your emotions raw as you always do...
...resp....