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Old 04-23-03, 03:40 AM   #2
SiniX
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it wasnt that bad, but your vocab should be more consistent. dont only use bigger words at the end of your lines. put them all over, use metaphors, multies, and make them punches hit hard and you be aight. wordplay is the name of the game
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