you need some more complex lines try more multis
and try to get lines to tie into each other
4 lines that ryhme come off much better than just one or two

this kid so pathetic, he starin at men, some people refer to him as a 'man' lesbian//1
but i guess i'm alright, since he gay, but this bitch betta watch what he say//2

Try somethin like this
This kids so pathetic... staring at men, Wyla's the original male lesbian
Not that there's a problem just dont apporach me from the back or the punches will truly start flyin

see what I'm sayin

you got potnetial, just need to elevate