Tha Emporer Of A Common Place, Tha Cold Throne Of Lethargy..
Tha Disgruntled Exists, From Tha Hallways I Hear Laughing..

good imagery i can tell you have some knowledage and experiacne from the jump

Governing A Crumbling Empire From Tha Voice Of An Inaudible..
Unheard Of In Tha Manner That His Own Actions Talk To You..

flow was on point dope release

Raised Through A Distorted Image, His Flowchart Already Planned..
He Cant Control His Own Mind, How Is He Supposed To Rule Land?.

damn liked the flow here as well and im feelin the story that it seems to be comin out to

Tha Grains Of Sand, In Proportion To His Managed Village..
So That 9000 Eyes Could Vision It, Tha Decline Christening..

not sure if that rhymed but the content was nice

Pillaging From Tha Christmas Tin, A Modern Day Fairy Tale..
If Modern Was Only Tha Forsaken And Day Was Tha Forest Trail..

gettin to the heat i hope

His High Majesty Even Thought That He Could Breathe In Space..
A Lifetime Of Over Sustenance, Made That Hard On This Place..

this story-line seems to be gettin better in each bar

More Of A Remissness Than A Place, Let Tha Turth Be Told..
His Authority Over A Beating Metropolis Was Always Gonna Fold..

i think were gettin closer to the climax

Like A Slender Pillow, But His Sentiment Seemed Enigmatic..
Tha Creation Of A Self Destructing Device, He'd Be Tha Plastic..

flow was on point and nice similies

Thats Contained Beyond Tha Steely Chassis On Tha Outside..
His Love For Tha Job Decreased As Tha Inductible Crowd Died..

okay sorta confused

Lost In His Own Planet Of Tha Apes, But Replace Tha Apes..
With Unexcited Inhabitents Who This King Is Scared To Face..

okay im back to gettin it

His Perfection Was Cataclysmic, Tha Catalyst Of Fallacy..
Tha Director Of Tha Nest That Diminishes Like Tha Hornet Bee..

good vocab and ya similies seem to even imrpove each time

Tha Monarchy Physically Depreciates Brick Sand By Brick Sand..
Commands Ignored, So All Words Are Worthless As They Withstand..

shits gettin caotic

Tha Orders Of A Superhuman With No Powers And No Appeal..
No Creditability, Hes Like Tha Human King Of Tha Ant Hill..

hmm intresteding

No Right Hand Man, No Right Way Of Being Tha Man He Used To..
Tha Malefactor Of History, Asking Himself "But Who Knew?"..
How About Tha Whole Population, News Spread During Slumber..
While You Were Relaxing And Up Cropped Another Two Wonders..

deep into the story shit's gettin kinda weak im hopin for a point to this

That Makes 9, But You Were Too Busy Being Nobody In A Shadow..
Fallen Off Tha Hierarchy, Climbing Tha Shoot, Not Tha Ladder..

okay there we go nice punch

Finally Left Tha Castle, But Only To Look For Lost Ovations..
Tha Towns Center In Bad Weather, Is Where Ended Tha Paving..
Insanity Is Brain Storming, Following Tha Path Towards Omega..
You Were On Tha Wrong Track To Start Off With Like A Quaker..

daum nice ender


overall i liked the way the story started off i just felt there was no whole point ot this but the way you set up ya flow and sim's and shit were nice plus the fact ya vocab made it even more complexed to read and intresting overall i think ya had a dope drop i like ish like this to be posted more often i was scrollin thru the pages and found this i read it and liked thanx for postin it good drop