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i began to clean and ran across some photos i hate.
before my father died. life was nothing but great.
(nice and i can relate, not with death but livin with 1 parent)
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i looked at a picture and studied deep into my fathers eyes.
and he spoke to me. as if he was telling me to die.
(this shits deep, almost scary)
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as if he jumped out of his picture he saw my embarassment stared back.
(niceness on this one)
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to the skies that we once roamed and made speckles in the oceans of black.
(again......this is nicely put)
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this was the story of a man named alex mack and the tale of his fall.
he thought he left to the skies to fly but had imagined it all.
his life was a mangled mess and insanity raged at his brain.
no one to blame besides the fake voices of imposterous laughter.
his mom found him. hung to death. hanging by a belt by his rooms rafter.
(i like the end cause it flips the whole idea i was thinkin)
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Overall....
This was nice, at first i was confused about the topic or anything but the more a read the more i got it, and at the end it had me like "ohhhhh ooook i get it now", so it was definitley a change of what ive seen lately. So I give u most props for the way u put the storyline and the originality of it all. You used good flow and presice vocab. Good good shit kid, keep em droppin.......
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Uppin For Sleepers