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Old 04-25-03, 07:11 PM   #3
combatjoe
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you gotta make sure you know what the words your using mean as well dog, like gallant means like virtuous and upstanding, like a knight is gallant, so it doesnt really make much sense in the way you used it.

you dont wanna make it sound like your desperate to make things rhyme, if shit doesnt make sense it'll ruin the whole flow.

also i'd try to use some variety rather than ending like 8 lines with words ending in -it

just my opinion, keep working dog
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