this will be fun....
alright heres the run-down....
1. self-glorification is played out like tetris (<<<so is that line)
2. your rhymes arent very original
3. spit on a topic besides how dope you are
4. reply to my open mic because... i want you to...

it was good for a person with 14 posts... but save your funny lines for battles etc etc.... take a look at some of the vets open mics and you'll see what im talking about...

good things about it...
1. You weren't stuck in caps lock like 99% of newbs
2. You can press the enter key unlike most newb
3. You have talent
4. the ending cool...

thats about it! return the favor!