ok..... where should i start..... alright, i checked out ya drop, and it was decent, wat u need ta do is put sum metaphores and smilies and wordplay in dere, and put ya lyrics in bar, but let me tell ya dis, dont even say u can rap lik eminem, i dont giv a fuck if u were messin around, even if u wrote sum shit dat was 100 times betta den dis shit, u aint neva, eva, eva, eva goin rap lik em, im sorry it aint goin happin, eminem is one of da best rappers eva in da game, and i dont even lik him all dat well, but u sayin u
rap lik him, shit dats a insult gurl, and if i soun mean oh well, it looks lik u jus were listein ta em w/ all ur lil friends w/ all ur posters of him in ya room, den got on da net and tryed ta rap and soun lik em,and heres anotha thin, eminem even in a verse as short as ur drop right now, nev only rhymes one word, i mean c'mon gurl, ask any one of da vets on dis site and they'll tell ya jus wat im bout ta tell ya now so listen up, u hav to be eitha raised rough, or had a really fucked up life ta rap, u hav to, and if u culd spill ur heart and tell bout ur life on paper and hav otha peolpe feel it, ur on da right track, cause rap is not bout sayin how bad u r or how many people u hurt, its bout REAL LIFE shit dat has happened befo' not a lil pretend story, dat u made up ta soun hard, tha way ur rap was writtin it looks ta me ,and alot a otha peole lik u aint been through shit, a yo i could be wrong, u might of been raised harda den me and half da peeps writtin to ya, i dont kno, but wat were sayin is stop bein eminem, stop bein pac, and stop dissin on ja rule jus cause em and 50 dont lik him, and most of all be ur self NOT feminem, change da name, r u'll get laughed at every time u drop, start bein u fo' who u r not who u idolize on mtv aight, look we aint dissin on u, we tellin u dis shit so u'll get betta, and we sayin get rid a dis feminem shit, or get da fuck off dis website....... i'm expectin ta hear betta 4m u, i kno u can write betta den dis , now prove it ta us......peace eazy

return da fava and check out my drop " Dear Dad" maybe u culd learn sumthin , much love