blah, this bullshits is dumb....take it to bitch slapped

about the rhyme, i actually quite liked it...in all honesty the flow wasn't all that great, your rhyme structure does need work but the content that was in it was pretty nice...i coud feel the meaning behind your rhyme and your message was portrayed well. I would suggest you try incorporating more multi's into your rhymes though just to add complexity

You dont have a complicated vocabulary but, your rhyme seemed real and reality doesnt always require elevated vocab....

this was a decent drop, not great but solid non the less