I agree with fat man.. I ain't gonna give no props on this.. shit was weak.. not 'cause your white, I am too.. you need some serious elevation to ever think about not being laughed at.. sorry but it's true.. look at the quality of the rhymes from people who actually get mad props from vets, then compare to yours.. you suck.. sorry but that's why they call me BLuNT.. htat's why there's something called elevation..

1: your bars are too short (so are your verses)
2: no-word play at all, no sick multies
3: some lines don't rhyme, maybe they do with your accent but not with mine
4: using simple rhyme words like "Bangin', Hangin, or Faces, Races" is elementary.. it's alright to use them but u use simple structure like that thru-out..
5: keep it simple, you're trying to be complex but you havn't reached that levle yet..

^ that should help a-bit

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