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Old 05-02-03, 11:09 AM   #10
Orikle
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Treach's drop was aiight...Youngs looked alright till I got to here..

"you said "My style electrifys you like a million volt velocity"/ while that's just a bad imitation of a try at lyrically mocking me!/ you couldn't produce that much energy if 12,279 hundred enormous electric eels crawled up your ass and shocked ya!/ "

^^This whole section here^^ turned me right off your verse, in the first bar, you fed, which is known everywhere as very weak and then you proceeded with really cheesy attempts at punches...You gotta word shit better...And you have to structure you're whole verse alot better its fucked to read the way you got it...But learn from these mistakes...

Vote= Treach P...
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