This beats so dope lol. Aussi?
your lyrics are pretty good, it;s obvious you can write you just can't flow that well, you need ot leanr how to hit the snares in the beat, at leats 2-3 time sina 4 bar set, hmm...your also forcing words in lines, you should try to just get rid of some words so the liens fit better together. do this, when you write make sure every bar is within 2-3 sylibles of each other.
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