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These both weren't very impressive...
thought I'd see better.
But that's just me, I'm not a huge fan of strictly storytelling.
Avalon took this though. I little more creative... there was more to it...structure needs some work.
Domains verse seemed rushed... that last line wasn't any good...sorry man.
But I didn't like the whole dialoge thing though by avalon... you have to let your verse speak...
Nice try though.... at least you're thinking.
vote- avalon
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