I'm givin' this to fgee.. damn yo, you ripped it.. way more complexity, and it flowed better from the first line to the last..

"misery compounded by rejection in music, when they ripped up the contract i turned to alcohol and abused it,"... I liked that line...

DirtBoy, dawg, your shit hardly flowed, the vocab and wordplay were minimal at best... your best line was:
"i back off in agony and yell "i'll kill you before i ever die!!"/
my vision's blurring and the pain is causing me a headache/
i don't know if it's real but he's dead even if this is fake/"... it's a couple lines, but the best of the whole verse.. you need to elevate alot more.. it kinda sucks that they stuck you with fgee, 'cause he's got mad skills anyway.. lol.. luck of the draw I guess.. peace

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