the title was too strong for the piece.
The writing was elementary and showed nothing impressive. You made yourself look ignorant and unintelligent by writing this the way you did, in such a skim fashion.
You shy away from detail... either because you can't use it or you don't know any and it shows.
This was unimpressive overall and your writing makes you look dumb for using such a title.... you do not back it up at all.

you need to improve.
but good luck with that.

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