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Old 05-07-03, 09:45 PM   #14
G.Hod
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'Twas close, and hopefully not the Best of Both Worlds.. However, Brutalizer built off of Dizzle's, which is a proverbial no-no..

"While you wait-for-liquor you can serve my lyrics specially catered"

Punches: Tie
Flow: Dizzle
Metas: Tie
Wordplay: Not Much.. Tie
Multis: Dizzle by a hair (more complex)

SUGGESTIONS: To both of you, don't use the bold and italicized letters to emphasize punches and other fine points, makes the given devices seem forced.

Brutalizer: Don't build, make a flow in a more simple format..
Dizzle: Sometimes, the rhyme scheme and flow you used are going to be too complex for this particular setting (if you catch my drift).. a sublinimal tip..
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