I like this one from you. The second part was good but the first part hit me harder.

"A childs mind is a vast ocean, full of ideas
and questions to last a lifetime/
time...kids have plenty, but dont use it wisley/
Time is an endless clock, fingers ticking down to ure death sentance/
Don't think bout thier future, just think bout whats goin on/"

That part right there was what I was like when I was younger, and still am today, occasionally. So I liked it a lot. Nice job.