ayo... rhyme scheme needs work vocab needs mad work complexity of what ur rhymin with needs work, u rhymed god fog dog, but i saw a few things that says u might have some creativity ur just unpracticed

if being depressed was illegal
id always be getting sued,

shit im on my own hit list.
i better shut up. before i get the gun in my hand pist.
im the type of person who doesnt wanna die alone
so to make u feel bad ill murder myself...while your on the fone

^^ those lines show u might have some potential if u get get tha mechanics down
just keep writtin and keep spittin

hit up mine will ya tha mothers day one