Yo......piece was ok......

Ya need a good structure. Try workin with multi's and wordplay as well...You coulda made this piece ALOT better with just those two improvements. No doubt.....

An since your new....If ya don't know what I'm talkin about....check the wackness emergency center....it will tell you all the basics you need to know...

Keep writin and goin.....just bein honest dogg

Please reply to my open mic "The Gifted and Confused"
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=45076

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