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Originally posted by Bash
damnnnnnnn man , ,, tell me , why every single newbie has too be whack
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Your a fucking asshole..
This piece wasnt that bad lyrically..
You need help structuring your verse..
Try writing like:
blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee...
blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee blah//
blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee...
blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee blah blee blah//
Make them even.. It helps flow a lot.
You just need more experience.. Show more emotion, get a bigger vocab..
And you'll be fine.
4 out of 10 on this though.