nice verse, but you need to organise your lines. with it written like this, it's difficult to read, takes away from the piece. You had a good flow, as far as I could see, but you need to add wordplay and multis for it to be seriously dope.
the guy you're lookin for doesn't exist babe, cuz men are dumb. sorry to tell you, but we are. with that said, keep lookin for him.
Nice drop,check out my verses(the links are in my sig)
Peace

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