i dont understand why newbies feel they've gotta always drop their first post as "guns, i'm tough and bitches" subject matter.

being original is 50% of a good piece. and i saw a lot of played concept and vocab in this, there were one or two stand out lines here:

Like Tha X-Men, my niggaz is street mutants

-From Battle raps, to battles wit straps wit cats Im Known
-My click one of a kind, cant be cloned

^^best lines in it

just up the vocab and add a few multis, think of an original concept that you can relate to and you'll be on your way.