Y'know, the Guru Kid used to have this saying, "Cease becoming, begin to be."

I think that applys here. They way you wrote this poem was like a situation where one, in this case you, were trying to become something. But you couldn't, and it seemed hopeless. First verse gave the feeling of being attacked, second verse gave the feeling of being hurt. Third verse gave me the feeling of hoplessness, and the last part made it seem like you can't just 'be'.

Am I right?

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.