well...that wasw real simple werent it,i aint hatin but,you had a meanign and a point to what you were saying,amybe spacin the bars would make it easier to follow...it was a nice verse,it was very simple and you rhyme scheme was really really simple,you need to add multies and wordplay into your peices then itll be aiight,but you had a point to wha tyou were saying and you sound like you meaning it,an dif your feelin it,then its al good,you jus tneed to keep practicign aiight missy...good up....


peep my zions verse,tell me wha tyou think,im uppin it in th erb legends forum too....