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it begins to rain and i dissappear into nothin, like david blain
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aiight to the verse,i was feelinwhat you were sayin,you got a positive outlook on a world thats bleek,lucky you...i enjoyed reading it,i liked how your spreadin th emessage of peace an shit at the end,i liked the rain line alot actually...it was ill...but you need to up your vocab some nahmean,nothin against you dont take this the wrong way,but your vocab seemed to me pretty simple in parts,wich is all goodif thats your style,im jus tellin ya thats how i saw it...but overall i liked it alot,that rain dissaperance line especially.damn...i dunnowhy i like it so much but i do....keep posting,elevate elevate dun,you got mad potential.....keep it up...
bismillah
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