Yo...you want criticism....cool......I thought you had a few good lines.......that parachute line was hot and original.....something sorely lacking on here in metas.......I felt ya flow.....some of yo shit......I got the message.....but it seemed kinda played..specially that Iraqui soldier line.....that is way overused..........and your ender.......weak as shit....should finished with somethin hard......

Just my opinion though....good verse......just needed more pizzaz or some shit....something spicy..........

Yo hit up the polls on my battle with dice-roller.......thanks