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Nice piece, nice of you to share your religious beliefs with the world in poetic form. I liked this piece, though I did notice one forced line which I think needs work on:
"So peace to all the prophets including Jesus, David, Moses, and Abraham...
And Prayers and Peace to Muhammad, the greatest man..."
Right there, it just looked as though you were looking for a rhyme, and you found a rhyme but it just seemed forced.
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