That was a pretty good writing.

I'm trying to learn how to write better stuff myself and one thing that might help you is a bigger vocab. The more words you know the better you can express yourself. I'm still working on that cause I'm an idiot

"it's been a long long while since i have found peace
thoughts of finding it, by becomeing deceased
but still i rise after every nights sleep
another day survived another demon i shall defeat"

Those were the lines that I liked the most out of it. Made me feel that you don't want to give up. Real positive. Keep posting more up here.