I thought this was a good writing. A lot of feeling in it. The concept was definately a good one.

"Leaving memories of Africa
Trapped in a bruised uterus
She looked at me as if to say
Brother are you new to this
new world order where
bitches and niggas are caught up
in this system that taught us
that our value lies in the papers"

That part was good. It stood out to me most cause the last 2 lines in it really seem to be true. Good post though. Keep posting them up here.