This was a nice writing. I liked it. The rhyming was basic on it but that didn't really matter because of the content, in my opinion.

"When you watch life pass you by it seems like a life time
But after it all youll feel like it flew by
time is a dimension we may never understand, but it will always be around."

That right there couldn't be more true. I was really feeling those lines.

"You must swallow yo gut and move forward, be free
Open yo heart and bare yo soul to tha world
Take those crucial steps forward and let your life unfold"

I liked those lines a lot too. Plus it was a good way to end the writing.