the first word that comes to mind is choppy.

It was too choppy. Too many spelling errors. Not enough time was put into this and it shows. To become a poet is pay attention to detail. There were too many unecessary things in there and not enough description for the structure of the poem.

For example.
scared to reveale the scars placed on my fucking face//
^^ besides the spelling errors, you use "fucking face" in this line.... and there is nothing wrong with swearing to let out anguish in a poem. However this is not believable because you say that the scars were "placed" on your "fucking face".
Now think man... if something is "placed" on something does it sound bad, or gruesome or hurt, etc.? no. ... You've got to make the lines believable ...
scared to reveal the scars dug into my fucking face.
or slapped on
or thrown on....
catch what I'm saying.

Every line works in itself, so make it work in the right direction.
Just think about those details when writing... but I felt the emotion there and the reality vs. feeling dilemma going on.

Elevate.
Peace

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