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Old 05-22-03, 11:25 PM   #14
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ok, on further examination, I can say you were on topic (nebulous reasoning to the max), but I was under the idea that rap sort of rhymes. your structure leaves a good bit to be desired. with better formatting it might be clear, but in a bigass chunk, it is much harder to see. maybe i am new at this, but i see lines without rhymes in your attacks.