damn, this was really nice girl. Just playin dude, heh.
Somehow, this piece seems like its from the perspective of a very intelligent dog, talking about how his species has been enslaved...or maybe I'm just crazy...
anyway, like everyone else said, this had sickening wordplay, multis and vocab, but a couple of your rhymes didn't seem to rhyme...
I saw some internal rhymes too, but that might've just been coincidence
Peace

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