Thread: "Injection"...
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Old 05-25-03, 03:06 PM   #2
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What a suprise, another good one from you It started off pretty good and got better. I liked the content and flow of it too.

"As you walk into the Chamber
You know your lifes in danger
They Chain you Down to the Table
You try to fight, but you aren't able
Watching the doctor walk around you
Clutching your fist so hard they turn blue
You realise there is nothing you can do
Your inside burn like a deep infection
On your arm you feel A light Compression
Then you fall Limp From the Injection."

That was my favorite part. Very good descriptions in it. I liked how it rhymed too. Those last 3 lines are really good. Keep posting them.
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